Show... Don't Tell

Verse 1

My heart is shattered into a, (million piece x2) million pieces.

Shattered like glass, laying (on the ground x3).

No-one can fix this (broken heart x2).

On-one but you.



Chorus

You where there one day gone the next

I hope that one day I will see you again.

Not too soon I will see you up-above

It's hard without you.



Verse 2

Your gone and you took a piece my my heart with you.

It's gone, gone with you.

I don't mind that you took it with you.

I just wish I knew when you will fix it.



Chorus

You where there one day gone the next

I hope that one day I will see you again.

Not too soon I will see you up-above

It's hard without you.



Verse 3

My heart is a black hole.

In the middle is the hole where you took a piece of my heart.

It's taking everything with you.

My happiness, my light, my memories.

Everything is escaping me going out looking for you.



No-one can fix this broken heart.

On-one but you.



Can you guess which emotion I choose. You will never get it!

Alliteration, Personification, Onomatopoeia & Hyperbole

Alliteration
The sun sizzled the swimmers skin.
I accidentally ate an awful apple.
Beth borrowed Barry’s books before biology.
Slipping and sliding, I stumbled in the snow and slush.
Many mysterious men mumbled messages.
The gallant goat gobbled gobs of garbage greedily.
The rapidly rising river rushed rampantly.

Red roses shone as the rising sun glowed ruby red. 

While wandering the wobbly white whale wobbled.

The tired traveller, tried to take the weight off at the bottom of the track.

Personification

The wind whispered through the gloomy forest. 

What is being personified? The wind

What human trait or quality has it been given? The wind whispered

The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers.

What is being personified? The flowers.

What human trait or quality has it been given? The flowers have feeling and they are happy.

As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.

What is being personified? The sun.

What human trait or quality has it been given? The sun beat them.

The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.

What is being personified? The chainsaw.

What human trait or quality has it been given? The chainsaw sang. 

As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly.  

What is being personified? The pencil

What human trait or quality has it been given? The pencil is able to walk/move on it's own.

When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her.

What is being personified? A pair of high heels.

What human trait or quality has it been given? The pair of high heels called out.

My book gave me hug telling me everything is going to be alright.

The song was my best friend it was always there.

The cat cried and screamed for someone to care about them.

The number hit me for forgetting it.

Onomatopoeia

A plate being dropped on the floor. Smash

A balloon being burst. Pop

A gun being shot. Bang

Someone eating chips. Crunch

A light being switched on. Click

A fierce dog. Growl

A small bell being rung. Tinkle

A door opening. Creek

A bomb exploding Boom

A child screaming. Screech

The old engine chugged down the rickety track. 

The hard-hit tennis ball whistled by my ear.

The truck’s brakes screeched in the distance.

The rain beat on the metal barn roof.

His guitar strings twanged the sad melody. 

The old floor creaked as we walked slowly across it. 

The fire cracked and popped on a cold night. 

The snake hissed when I startled it.

I sreached as the bell went signalling the end of the day.

Bang. "What was that?" "Nothing just me closing my book"

Snap! There goes that rubber band.

Smack! I walked into a draw handle again.

Hyperbole

I’m so hungry I could eat a whole elephant! (Hyperbole/Not)

May is the nicest month of the year. (Hyperbole/Not)

Her brightly coloured dress hurt his eyes. (Hyperbole/Not)

The roof rose up and down to the rhythm of the music. (Hyperbole/Not)

I ate all of my salad for lunch.  (Hyperbole/Not)

The dog was so dirty it had a tomato plant growing on its back. (Hyperbole/Not)

A strong. The wind knocked me over.

A headache. My headache is killing me.

A fast computer. The computer when like the wind.

A funny movie. I died laughing at the movie.

A hot pan. The pan was hotter than the inside of a volcano.
A loud, crying baby. The crying baby was a siren.
Heavy groceries. The grocery weights.
A scary dog. The dog was a demon.

Revision
‘As straight as an arrow’ Simile
‘Lucky lady’ Alliteration
‘Boom!’ Onomatopoeia
‘The city was a jungle’ Metaphor

Similes and Metaphors

Similes

My bedroom was as black as a cave in the depths of the earth.
The classroom after school became as noisy as a gaggle of gabby geese.
The cat capered along the fence top like a tightrope walker on the high wire.
My anger crashed into me like waves against the shore.

The cloth was as black as coal.
The wet ball was as slippery as an eel.
My little sister is as playful as a kitten.
The top of this table is as smooth as silk.
I’ve been as busy as a bee.
The lamb is as white as snow.

Similes and Metaphors

As slippery as an eel. Simile

Arnie was a man-mountain. Metaphor

He was a lion in battle. Metaphor

She is as pretty as a picture. Simile

The striker was a goal machine. Metaphor

The torch lit up the room as if the sun had already risen early. Simile

The moon was a misty shadow. Metaphor

My friend has a face like thunder. Metaphor

After the 3 o'clock bell when the school became the fields of Asphodel.

When the teacher randomly complemented me it felt like I was in the fields of Elysium.

Her rant when on infinitely.

She shone like the first stars in the night sky.

The ruby was a bright fire consuming the necklace.

She was as intelligent as Athena.

What have I learnt? I have learnt how to spell metaphor.

How does this work show my learning? This shows that I can recognise metaphors and similes and write my own.

What am I wondering? How long have similes and metaphors been around for and who wrote the first similes and metaphors.

Figurative Language

Mix and Match Poetry Terms and Definitions

Figurative language - Saying one thing but meaning something else.
Literal language - Meaning exactly what you say.
Simile - Compering two unlike things using the words like or as.
Metaphor - Compering two unlike things not using the words like or as.
Personification - Giving human qualities to non-human things
Imagery - Writing with detail to arouse one or more of the five senses.
Idiom - A phrase common to people who speak the same language - saying one thing but meaning another.
Hyperbole - An exaggerating on facts.
Alliteration - Repetition of constraint sounds in a piece of writing.

Idioms

What have I learnt? I have learnt what an idiom is and a few sayings.

How does this work show my learning? 

What am I wondering? How long have idioms been around for and who wrote the first idiom.

Critical Literacy: Dawn Raid

Critical Literacy: Dawn Raid

Who would be most likely to read this text and why?

Anyone who is interested in New Zealand history and culture around this subject and time.

How are children, teenagers, young adults, and adults constructed in this text?

The adults are all written as important figures with a strong voice, the young adults (Lenny and Rawiri) are a bit reckless but they do what they do because they believe it is the right thing to do. Children Tavita, Ethan and Archie are like most little boys, they do before they think, "One Kid - one brain, two kids - half a brain, three kids - NO BRAIN AT ALL" Dawn Raid. The teenagers who are the for front are all different having characteristics. All the characters are well written with different personalities and motivations.

Is the text fair?

Yes, it tells of an important time in New Zealand's history, even the best places have their problems and we need to learn from them.

Conclusion

T=Title, 'The Merchant of Venice'
A=Author, William Shakespeare
K=Key Argument,  use words from the question, what you are arguing,
A key moment that surprised was when Shylock doesn't get his pound of flesh.
A key moment that shocked the reader was when Antonio agreed to pay a pound of his flesh to Shylock if he didn't repay his bond.
O=Outline, The three things you are going to write about, Red, White and Blue sentence.
Shylock and Antonio hate each other.
Antonio was willing to die for money to give Bassanio.
Shylock doesn't show mercy.
L=Link,
In William Shakespeare's 'A Merchant of Venice' a key moment was when Antonio agreed to a bond of a pound of flesh if he couldn't pay back Shylock. This was shocking because Antonio hated Shylock and promised to mistreat him in the future. Antonio was willing to die for Bassanio even though he begged him not to. Finally, because Shylock had never shown mercy and did not at the trial. For these reasons it is clear that this moment was shocking to the reader.