As the bag of colorful sphere came around I felt more and more scared. Mostly because the bag was full of gobstoppers. I have never had a gobstopper in my life and my mum has never let me have one because she says that it will make my teeth rot and I don’t want that to happen. I picked one up it was the colour of a lemon. It smelt of smarties and chewing gum. I looked at the penny sized ball in my hand. It felt as hard as a diamond and smooth like a page in a book. Then Miss Mcleod told us to put it in our mouths. I didn’t want to eat it but my friend Lauren was saying it was ok to put it in my mouth so I did it. My mouth exploded with a taste of fruity mentos and smarties. After what seemed like 4 hours I took my gobstopper out now it was as small as a pea and was a different colour. I took one last look at it then dropped it into a bin. “Bye bye little gobstopper” I thought to myself.
Hi Tia, I'm Lauren from S.H.S. Great writing but I was wondering why you had it? Plus, who is we?
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said "Bye bye little Gobstopper" but I would recommend to change the "..." to '...'. But it's up to you if you want to change it.